Query Letters

by Betsy Ashton

Betsy Ashton, born in Washington, DC, was raised in Southern California where she ran wild with coyotes in the hills above Malibu. She protested the war in Vietnam, burned her bra for feminism, and is a steadfast Independent. She is a writer, a thinker, the mother of three grown stepchildren, companion and friend. She mentors writers and writes and publishes fiction. Her first mystery, Mad Max Unintended Consequences, was published in February 2013. The second in the series, Uncharted Territory, A Mad Max Mystery, came out in April 2015. In her spare time, she is the president of the state-wide Virginia Writers Club. She loves riding behind her husband on his motorcycle. You’ll have to decide for yourself if and where she has a tattoo.

August 5, 2009

Okay, I drafted and redrafted my query letter with the help of several friends.

I reviewed Noah Lukeman’s How to Write a Great Query Letter. I reread Chuck Sambuchino’s advice on the three paragraph rule, which by the way is similar to Lukeman’s but in a different order.

I read Sambuchino’s blog daily. He has a new feature – great query letters and why they are great.

And I’ve read Query Shark faithfully.

Guess what? They all disagree. Lukeman and Sambuchino favor the three paragraph approach: 1. why this agent, 2. description of the plot, and 3. a very brief but appropriate “why me” bio. The order may change, but the gist is the same.

Sambuchino ran an example of a great query letter for a graphic novelist. Let’s see, a paragraph providing author viability on the topic, second paragraph with more bio, third paragraph with more author background, fourth introduces the graphic novel (at last!), fifth about the work and plot, sixth about the author’s publishing credits, seventh about the illustrator, and last the request to send a synopsis, etc. Hum, eight paragraphs. But the agent liked it.

Why do I write this? Because I have two query letter formats: Lukeman/Sambuchino versus Janet Reid (a.k.a Query Shark) who frequently comments favorably on slightly less formulaic letters. Some agents will get one format; others a different format. I’m curious if either format will work. I will track who gets which letter.

Nothing like a little market research, huh?

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